Persuasive Writing-Why we Should fix our feild

We have been having a go at writing a piece of persuasive writing. Here is my piece of writing about why we should  fix our field.

Title A Short Statement about the topic. eg. ‘Rugby League Is A Great Sport’	Fix Our Field💮
Overview/ Statement of position A brief statement of your view about the topic.  What you believe or want to argue.	I strongly believe we should need to fix our field RIGHT NOW! Here are my reasons why we all want our field back. A Lot of our  sports equipment is not in use because we don't have the field, the field is a massive part of our school and it is going to waste, everyone at our school misses the field and we need the field back for events like cross country. The gala. these are the reasons why we need our field fixed.
Series of Arguments Reasons Your points supporting your view about the topic.  Your arguments to support your statement and information to support these arguments. Remember -argument -supporting detail, reasons, examples	Firstly,most of our sports equipment is not in use because we don't have the field to play soccer, rugby and lots more games with PE gear. We don't have enough room on the court to play lots of PE games at once, and we need the field to play more games.
	Secondly, the whīra (field) is a massive part of our school and it will go to waste . If we fix our field we will have less injuries and more space for children to play. Explain why we will have less injuries.
	Thirdly, I think everyone at our school misses the whīra(field)  and strongly feels they should have it back to do gymnastics and lots of other sports.Gymnastics and other sports are good because we can stay fit and strong and not be bored at play and lunch time.
	Finally, if we get our whīra (field) back we can have events like cross country and other events like the gala. We need the field to have the gala and I know every body at this school loves the gala and we all want the gala to happen as soon as possible! the gala  raises money for the school to use on buses and shows.
Concluding statement Summing it up.  A summary of your arguments and your view on the topic.	In conclusion we need our field for events,sports gear,everyone wants our field back and we also lour our field. The feild is a massive part of our school and it will go to waist. IT IS IMPORTANT WE HAVE A FIELD AT KARORO SCHOOL! CAN YOU imagine this school without a field?

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Create and Describe Your Own Creature

(Nogard)

WALT: be descriptive in our writing.  

Look at the description of a Nogard.  Now Create and describe your own creature that you will then be able to read to a buddy so that they can draw it.  Your description must be as detailed and clear as possible so that when you share it with others they will be able to visualise and draw you creature. Use lots of adjectives (describing words - big, small, round, green).

You must .....

• Have a name for your creature
• Start from the big things and work your way to the smaller things
• Describe the shapes
• Describe its neck, body, tail, wings etc.
• What does its head look like?Think about its eyes, nose, eyebrows, mouth, teeth
• Describe its legs/flippers/fins etc.
• What colours is it?
• Any extra details on the body like scales, spikes etc.
• Keep it simple and clear!
• Use correct punctuation and spelling.
• Check that your sentences make sense.

Remember that a good writer ‘paints’ pictures in their reader’s head with words.   This is what good descriptive writing does.  

Create your piece of writing here

Parahau The Taniwha

I know a Taniwha named  Parahau.

Her  long round body is like a little saveloy. She has a circular head and curly wings. Her 2 wings sit on her back. Parahau has a medium sized tail and a curly mouth. She has round ears and a little triangle nose. She has sharp triangles at the top of her body and round scales along the bottom. She has 4 rectangle legs. Her light pink hoofs are really rare. Her body is emerald green as well as her head. She has  light blue legs and deep yellow wings. She lives in a magic forest and collects purple leaves. We meet at the Moana Lake she comes crashing down and she gives me the purple leaves that she has collected. We go high in the mountains and see Ranginui the godfather of the sky, he is always glad to see us. I always love seeing Ranginui’s birds. We travel to different countries every month. When we go under water Parhau always glows bright yellow - kowhai. Parawhau can talk to the sea animals but they are always scared of Parhau because she is bright yellow. Every week we have fun and go to different places.

                                                                                                                

  Dakota’s drawing                                                  this is my original one

                                                                                                                             

Peer Evaluation   Name of Peer: Dakota

What I think you did well:  Maori words.

What I think you could improve on:Putting more detail about your. Taniwha

Self Evaluation

What I think I did well: making it make sense

What I could improve on: putting more detail in

my taniwha