Kia ora Lily, Your sea week writing has got a lot of good information. I like the pictures and they have to do with the writing. Next time you could say that Aotearoa means New Zealand because some people from other countries might not know what that means. From Nathan J.
I really enjoyed reading your sea week writing. I can see you have included lots of interesting information. I noticed a couple of sentences that either had words repeated, or need extra punctuation. This could be something to check for next time. I particularly liked reading about what you enjoy doing at the beach with your family, and your thoughts on saving the sealife. Well done lily, say hi to the happy apple from me.
Heya Lily! Love your pictures and placement of text. You have a lot of writing - you've obviously thought carefully about subject. Well done sweets! Cyb x
Kia ora Lily,
ReplyDeleteYour sea week writing has got a lot of good information. I like the pictures and they have to do with the writing. Next time you could say that Aotearoa means New Zealand because some people from other countries might not know what that means.
From Nathan J.
I really enjoyed reading your sea week writing. I can see you have included lots of interesting information. I noticed a couple of sentences that either had words repeated, or need extra punctuation. This could be something to check for next time.
ReplyDeleteI particularly liked reading about what you enjoy doing at the beach with your family, and your thoughts on saving the sealife. Well done lily, say hi to the happy apple from me.
Heya Lily! Love your pictures and placement of text. You have a lot of writing - you've obviously thought carefully about subject. Well done sweets! Cyb x
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