My Taniwha-Writing

For the past few weeks we have been practising descriptive language in our writing. We have been trying to'paint pictures with words'. We all got to invent our own taniwha. We all drew our own taniwha then we had to write about it and describe what it looks like, what we do with our taniwha and what our taniwha is like. Then we read our work to a buddy and they had a go at trying to draw our taniwha.

Create and Describe Your Own Creature

(Nogard)

WALT: be descriptive in our writing.  

Look at the description of a Nogard.  Now Create and describe your own creature that you will then be able to read to a buddy so that they can draw it.  Your description must be as detailed and clear as possible so that when you share it with others they will be able to visualise and draw you creature. Use lots of adjectives (describing words - big, small, round, green).

You must .....

• Have a name for your creature
• Start from the big things and work your way to the smaller things
• Describe the shapes
• Describe its neck, body, tail, wings etc.
• What does its head look like?Think about its eyes, nose, eyebrows, mouth, teeth
• Describe its legs/flippers/fins etc.
• What colours is it?
• Any extra details on the body like scales, spikes etc.
• Keep it simple and clear!
• Use correct punctuation and spelling.
• Check that your sentences make sense.

Remember that a good writer ‘paints’ pictures in their reader’s head with words.   This is what good descriptive writing does.  

Create your piece of writing here

Parahau The Taniwha

I know a Taniwha named  Parahau.

Her  long round body is like a little saveloy. She has a circular head and curly wings. Her 2 wings sit on her back. Parahau has a medium sized tail and a curly mouth. She has round ears and a little triangle nose. She has sharp triangles at the top of her body and round scales along the bottom. She has 4 rectangle legs. Her light pink hoofs are really rare. Her body is emerald green as well as her head. She has  light blue legs and deep yellow wings. She lives in a magic forest and collects purple leaves. We meet at the Moana Lake she comes crashing down and she gives me the purple leaves that she has collected. We go high in the mountains and see Ranginui the godfather of the sky, he is always glad to see us. I always love seeing Ranginui’s birds. We travel to different countries every month. When we go under water Parhau always glows bright yellow - kowhai. Parawhau can talk to the sea animals but they are always scared of Parhau because she is bright yellow. Every week we have fun and go to different places.

                                                                                                                

  Dakota’s drawing                                                  this is my original one

                                                                                                                             

Peer Evaluation   Name of Peer: Dakota

What I think you did well:  Maori words.

What I think you could improve on:Putting more detail about your. Taniwha

Self Evaluation

What I think I did well: making it make sense

What I could improve on: putting more detail in

my taniwha